Round two: the close, rebuilt.

Four more slides, working down the ranked list. The head to head mechanic, the four part close adapted from the source material, and the webinar-only bonus. Plus Sophie named as the person you actually speak to.

4new slides this round
11new slides in total
139→150slides

What went in

In deck order. Each closes a specific gap from the scorecard.

129

The head to head

Step 2 Pain / Step 7 Mechanisms

Day one surfaced the competitor name and then nothing was done with it. This turns that name into a score, live, in five minutes. It converts a general worry about AI into one number about one named rival, which is the most personal pain available in the whole two days, and it arrives immediately before the triage so people can diagnose why the score is what it is.

DO THIS NOW ยท FIVE MINUTES

The name on your Mirror card. Head to head.

  • 01
  • 02

Delivery. Read two or three scores out loud by first name. Do not soften a bad one. The bad ones are why the next section exists.

138

Four part close, part two

Step 8 Commitment / Step 13 Risk

The second half of the pattern interrupt. The room has just agreed they probably cannot, and this is where you say why, without insulting anybody. It sets up the honest truth slide that already follows.

IF WE CLOSED THIS CALL RIGHT NOW

Be honest with yourself for ten seconds.

  • You have the framework, your scorecard, your head to head number and your weakest pillar. So: would you go back to your desk this afternoon, open the Mirror card, and start on it? Not next quarter. Today, before the next thing lands in your inbox.
  • Doubtful. And not because you are lazy.

Delivery. Ask it and then stop talking. Count to five. The silence is the slide.

138

Four part close, part one

Step 9 Transition / Step 13 Risk

The build-then-break pattern from the source material. You stack proof until the room is nodding, ask the obvious question, and answer it with the opposite of what they expect. The interrupt is what makes the next ninety seconds land, because nobody has a script for being told no by the person selling to them.

I COULD GO ON

Others in exactly your position did this.

  • 250 brands. 300 percent average return. A luggage company nobody had heard of, ranking for 199 competitive terms inside three months, from a standing start. People with smaller teams than yours, tighter budgets than yours, and worse websites than yours. Does that mean you can?
  • Probably not.

Delivery. Deliver the proof fast and warm, then flatten your tone completely on "probably not". The tonal drop is the technique.

145

The Position Brief

Step 12 Bonuses / Step 14 Scarcity

The webinar-only bonus, which was the highest leverage mechanic still unbuilt. It is honest scarcity because the constraint is real: somebody has to spend an hour writing each one. It is also the artefact the marketing manager needs to take upstairs, which is the single strongest unmet need in the ICP research.

ONLY FOR PEOPLE ON THIS CALL TODAY

The one thing that is not going on the website.

  • The Position Brief
    One page. Where the machines place you, who gets named instead, what you currently rent, your six pillar score, and the single constraint to fix first. Written to be forwarded to the person who signs things, not filed.
  • Blank copy, everyone gets one
    It is in the pack with the slides and the skills. You can complete it yourself tonight from the four artefacts you are already holding, and it will be useful.
  • Filled in for you, if you book today
    Book before we close today and Sophie completes it with your real numbers before your call, on our letterhead, and you keep it whether or not we ever work together. That takes her about an hour per brief, which is the whole reason this is capped.
  • It is not mentioned on the booking page and I will not bring it up again after this slide. If you want the finished one, this is the window.

Delivery. Say the last line and mean it. Do not mention the Brief again after this slide, including in the Q and A.

The Position Brief

The webinar-only bonus, specced from the ICP research. This is the idea. The PDF still needs building.

The idea in one line

A one page internal document the attendee fills in with their own numbers during the webinar, designed to be forwarded to the person who signs things.

Why this and not something else

Why the scarcity is honest

The blank template goes to everyone, in the pack, and it is genuinely useful alone. The bonus is the completed version: Sophie fills it in with their real data before the call, on letterhead. That is about an hour of specialist time per brief, so the cap is a fact rather than a number picked to hurry anyone. Nobody is denied anything, and the constrained thing is genuinely constrained.

What is on the page

BlockContentsSource
1. Where we appear todayThree prompts, each marked named, missing or wrong. Plus factual errors found.Mirror card, day 1
2. Who is named insteadThe competitor, and the head to head score out of three. This is the number the CEO reads first.Head to head, day 2
3. What we rentAnnual paid spend, the three year change in cost per lead, and what it buys the day we stop.Rent ledger, day 1
4. Our six pillar scoreSix tick boxes, one per pillar, scored out of six.The six questions
5. The constraintWhich of the four problems, ticked, and where that means we start.The honest triage
6. What fixing it costsIn-house against partnered, side by side: hire, tooling, ramp, ground lost. Leave the numbers blank. They will fill them in more damningly than you would dare to.New
7. RecommendationThree lines they write, then one line on what is being asked for.Theirs

The one design rule

It must not look like a marketing asset. Their logo at the top, not yours. Muted and document-like, closer to a board paper than a brochure. StudioHawk appears once, small, in the footer, with no logo lockup and no QR code. If it looks like an agency leave-behind it gets binned. If it looks like an internal position paper it gets circulated.

Still on the list

What is left, now that two of the top three are done.

WhatEffort
1Tie-downs throughout the teaching. Still the cheapest lift in the deck. One closing question per mechanism, roughly twenty lines of copy.Low
2Feature to benefit to outcome pass. Every pillar item stops at feature. Touches 46 slides, so it waits on the export question.Medium
3Why you are running this webinar. Motive is still absent anywhere in two days.Trivial
4The in-house cost comparison as a slide. It is in the Brief now, but it should be on screen as well.Low
5Answer the "how long" question. Fear six for this ICP, still unaddressed.Low
6Show the expiry. Put the closed booking page on screen before the deadline.Low

Two things needing you

Set the cap

Slide 147 carries placeholder fields, and slide 145 now depends on the same number: how many completed Briefs can Sophie realistically write. One hour each is the working assumption. Set it, or cut both slides.

The export question is still open

Forty-six pillar slides came through empty in the .pptx. Until that is resolved, do not import this over your live deck.